This is todays Magpie Tales prompt picture from Tess, i found it a hugely sad picture , isolating and lonely,
Canteen Romance
you may feel my eyes
you may feel my eyes
upon the back of your neck
while you watch your lunch
diminish
overcome with loneliness
a tear
caught with my tongue
my only sustenance
i am the pitied
the next door nudge
all eyes are cast down
with knowledge ignored.
17 comments:
You have indeed caught the isolation at least of those who would rather not be.
This felt very isolating and sad to me too. I like what you wrote--it's heartbreaking...
i am the pitied
the next door nudge
all eyes are cast down
with knowledge ignored.
one of my favorite today so far.
poetic, beautiful, and striking imagery.
You have captured the mood of this piece so well.
I love the line
The next door nudge
Thank you Kay for another haunting and thought provoking piece. xxx
loneliness in a crowd - perfectly captured
Very true, quite impersonal setting!
Wonderful lines here... Love it!
JJRod'z
You made one trickling tear come to life ... well done!
a tear caught with my tongue my only sustenance...nice emotion in that ...great flow and love that last stanza
Surely each one caught in his own prison. Nicely done!
You did the loneliness of this so well..
Ouch unfortunatley for me I felt like that once when I was very young tender...you have captured this brilliantly...
Please send me your address xxxxx
Hugs Lynn xxxx
Oh, you hit it out of the ballpark with this one!
...I am the pitied
the next door nudge...
Wow.
thank you, thank you , thank you for all your wonderful comments...it means so much...xx kay
Sad!
"...a tear
caught with my tongue
my only sustenance..." Beautiful.
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