Sunday, 22 January 2012

today if i....



                       Credit ; Ever by Boris Hoppek

Today
if i curl up
tight
you might not notice me
if my eyes never meet yours
you may not blame me
for your mistakes
if i stay frozen here
my actions restricted
the bloom of your anger
may not rise
on my cheek
i am still
i am quiet
i am bound by fear.


Todays Magpie Tale from Tess, the prompt photo really stumped me for a while but i got there in the end!!

13 comments:

  1. MIGHT AND MAY ARE PRETTY RISKY
    i FEEL THE TIGHTNESS OF THE NARRATOR
    NICE TAKE ON PROMPT

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  2. Wow, a stinger. Beautifully written.

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  3. Great write Kay! Enjoyed it!

    Hank

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  4. ugh...there is def backstory to her feelings which you evoke quote well and leave me a bit of angry and sad...

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  5. Quite an original response to the prompt - well done.

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  6. Sad to have to live life that way. This person in your piece has lost the meaning of her true worth.
    Sad because it is so true to life, for some.
    Lovely writing.

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  7. This is excellent! I have felt like that myself.

    It almost reconciles me to the picture, which I now don't like much after all. A naked woman on a bed of something?

    I am going to come back.

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  8. so you chose to be the women, and have her an object of abuse -- interesting...

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  9. Yes rob well spotted , i am a woman but domestic violence isn't interesting at all..

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  10. She does appear to be cowering...sad...

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