Judas
i sit at the waters edge
my toes gritty with the shore
sand under my nails
trying to untangle the whirling mess of my emotions
the perfume of your skin
from my last kiss
invades my senses
my hands bloodied with the rips and tears
of the thorns
as i pick at the corners of my actions
betrayal and loss
line the surface of my guilt.
2nd April 2012
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Oh, this is powerful. Love the line, 'as i pick at the corners of my actions'
ReplyDeleteVery well done!
We do pick at our disgraces and humiliations!
ReplyDeleteTrue, you have captured "the whirling mess of your emotions" beautifully.
ReplyDeleteVery deep.Betrayal and loss were my themes too, but you used some wonderful descriptionsof the senses.I like ‘toes gritty with the shore’.
ReplyDeleteoy this is def emotion stirring...the unraveling of it all as we pick the knots of our own stupidity at times...
ReplyDeleteAh - wonderful words and you have indeed captured "the whirling mess of your emotions" beautifully!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
indeed you have captured this well....thanks for sharing your words
ReplyDelete"Pick at the corners of my actions"..that gave me a chill..powerful emotion runs through this..
ReplyDeleteA powerful and beautiful write Kay, and timely as well.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful...whirling mess of my emotions..have been there lot many times.
ReplyDeleteyou had me on a whirl too!
ReplyDeleteVery expressive. He has a lot of thorns to pick throug...
ReplyDeletethank you all so much for your lovely comments.....so many of the writers saw a nest..i saw a crown of thorns...i love how everyone views the picture prompt and the end product..i read them all..xx
ReplyDeletePoignant and evocative...nice...
ReplyDeleteI feel guilty and fraught, yet wistful.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully powerful!
ReplyDeleteYour Magpie title meshes well with the season ... very nice.
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